Cymro

Thank you, there are a few things that bug me about it, but I wasn't sure what. The reason I posted it was so I could get an objective opinion. With art I tend to be overly self-critical, but with writing I am the opposite.

I'm trying to make a scene where McCoy gets a deeper understanding of Spock, because they obviously argue a lot and almost act like they hate eachother, but underneath that they're acctually good friends, and I'm trying to get that in there.

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"Let me tell you something about humans, nephew: They're a wonderful, friendly people - as long as their bellies are full and their holosuites are working.

"But take away their creature comforts, deprive them of food, sleep, sonic showers, put their lives in jeopardy over an extended period of time and those friendly, intelligent, wonderful people...will become as nasty and as violent as the most blood-thirsty klingon."